BLOG REVIEW

In Daoud's blog post about A long Way Gone by Ishmael Beah I felt that his ideas were focused and his first paragraph ideas were planned out. I could tell that he had an objective to prove his point in the 2nd paragraph by the main points of evidence he was using. This blog post was very well written and thought out.


I felt that Daoud's first paragraph was though out really well. I think I could really improve on my introductions. Daoud has a simple summary of what happened to the main character, and how he got rescued by the UNICEFF. Then he starts expressing his ideas which are that the number of child recruits have dropped because of the extraordinary efforts of the government. He was saying that because of them there isn't as much of these kid soldiers. Which he later on proves. I think that child soldiers is child abuse. Your forcing an innocent child to face the struggles of war. You hear stories on the news about how military men are never the same when they come back. imagine what war does to children. Grown men still have nightmares about the battlefield, but what about the children. we need to get the word out that this is abusing the children. A child's worry should be trying to hide their gum in class, or trying to make up their homework for math 5 minutes before class. No child shall ever go through this.


I also felt that Daoud did a good job on proving his point with details. He included actual page numbers from the book and summarizing the content to help him. When I finished reading this post, I felt convinced that this problem is minimizing because of the valiant efforts of UNICEFF. His evidence was spot on. I think I would like to read the book. Reading this book would give me a new level of understanding. I feel that reading this book would give a layer of sadness. I would like to see what the author says about this topic. This would be a real serious book.


Daoud's blog post is filled with detail and filled with good pieces of evidence. His objective was clear, and at the end of the post I agreed with Daoud. Daoud did a good job explaining his point, and expressing good details.